This post was inspired by my Teach Write writers group. We all participated in writing an Ocean poem using the book Write the Poem.
This is also my first Poetry Friday post. This week's host is Jama's Alphabet Soup: https://jamarattigan.com/2020/05/14/poetry-friday-roundup-is-here-12/
Vast, dark, and deep
Close
But feels distant
There's a chill
A tingle when toes touch
The smell of salt
Tide comes in and out
Foam rolls between feet
Whoosh
Whoosh
Whoosh
In
Out
In
Out
In
Out
The waves crash
The sea a deeper blue
Thoughts released
Worries let go
Only for a moment
In the vast, dark, and deep
Michelle, I saw the Teach Write group's padlet and so I am glad that you joined us at Poetry Friday. This is a very caring and collegial community of writers. Since the ocean is my go-to-place I appreciate your poem that takes me there. I am a bit leery about traveling down to the ocean that is nearby because I feel there will be many disregarding the mask ruling. Your last stanza is a #poemofpresence and very soothing.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading Carol! I am hoping I can venture outside more and hope masks will become more common. Take care!
DeleteSuch a lovely, evocative poem. Your sensory details transported me right to the seashore.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jama for reading and hosting!
DeleteI love the shape of this poem. I think the ocean is the perfect place for worries to let go.
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DeleteLovely journey your "Ocean" poem took us on, and so moving too, thanks Michelle!
ReplyDeleteWoo hoo! Welcome to Poetry Friday, Michelle. I am so excited you joined us! (cue the Teach Write glitter!!!) What strikes me most about your poem is that dual sense of pleasure and terror about the ocean. Yes, the foam rolling between your feet on a hot day is magnificent, yet there is still that feeling of dread about the "vast, dark and deep." Love that repeated line with a twist. Congratulations! -- Christie @ https://wonderingandwondering.wordpress.com/
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Christie! You are such an inspiration and I can't get enough of poetry these days!
DeleteWelcome to Poetry Friday! So fun to see your response to the prompt! They are all so different!!
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DeleteWelcome to Poetry Friday, Michelle! You've made me yearn for those waves crashing, tide in and out. I love the movement of your poem, the way you've placed the words, like the ocean!
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading Linda!
DeleteThe whoosh and rhythm of the in out of the tide in your poem creates a sea sensory experience of letting go of worries, if only for a moment. Thanks for sharing. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading Bridget!
DeleteWelcome to Poetry Friday! I love the in and out part. Makes me feel a bit like yoga. As does being in ocean water. So relaxing!
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